hahaha wow. I can't believe people jumped on my nuts about that. You guys need to be less touchy and chill out a bit, it was a joke. Let's hit this step by step. =] First off, Este, i find it extremely ironic you call me ignorant off of a 3 word response, then comment about quick judgements. In case that's over your head or not overt enough for you, I'm saying you're the ignorant one making a quick judgement. Kthx. Vanin, I totally understand what she's aiming to get out of the responses, but the majority of threads across these forums rarely stay on topic. I find it ridiculous that people jump on me for doing it on this thread, and in a non offensive way. I understand how difficult it is to open up and lay a piece of you out for everyone to dig into, and how nervewracking seeing responses can be, but that doesn't justify ANYBODY jumping down someone's throat just because their response wasn't "i like it!" I didn't bash her writing, and I didn't have anything constructive. I think that line (especially coming from me, the teen angst scene kid in girl jeans) is able to be written off as humor that isn't funny, and most definitely a neutral statement. [And for the record, I too am totally about some existentialism, and write fairly often on the topic. ] Alec, you're SO drunk. I have no idea where you get it mixed up that me calling your writing emotional is a defense mechanism. YOUR WRITING IS EMOTIONAL. You agree to that, don't be silly. I admit I did make that response as a dismissal, but not in order to avoid the pain of facing what you wrote. Or however you accused me of acting. o_0 I dismissed writing what I personally felt in the form of a constructive post, for fear of, ironically enough, people jumping down my throat. I hate situations like these so much, and I see them so often, especially being a teenager reading countless blogs from people at school. The second one response isn't "i like it lol!" everyone flips. Also, the response was "so emo", not "too emo." Beyond that, don't make subtle personal character attacks ("if you aren't in touch with yourself"), especially on someone you know literally nothing about. Plus, regardless if you're in touch with yourself or not, I don't think that sets a definite decision if their opinion will dictate your writing as "too emotional" or not. Quit making ridiculous assumptions and claims with no logic or warrant to back them. If my comment honestly did upset you, here's nearly two years worth of my writing: http://kuroikami.livejournal.com/ Hell, if you're too lazy to find something that really puts me on display, these are some of the "omfg emo" posts. [dear god i hope mocking myself doesn't offend more people x_x.] http://kuroikami.livejournal.com/70991.html short rant http://kuroikami.livejournal.com/68867.html <-- some existentialism and a story http://kuroikami.livejournal.com/67161.html <-- more existentialism http://kuroikami.livejournal.com/62674.html poem zomg http://kuroikami.livejournal.com/57365.html emo http://kuroikami.livejournal.com/58594.html emo ;alskdjf;alksdjfd. I dunno, I apologize if a humorous response is so out of line, personally on my LJ I appreciate something to lighten the all too often dark mood. And last of all, my actual in-depth opinion: I like the first paragraph, it does a good job of getting the reader's attention by combining a bit of shock writing with great imagery and vocabulary. I feel that the end of the first paragraph directly contradicts the second, in that, the second conveys self hate and speaks of how you warp reality in order to depress yourself and hate yourself further while the first puts normal in quotations. I feel that if you truly indulge yourself in the self loathing mindset, you wouldn't see yourself as normal, in which case, you wouldn't call into question the idea of normality, by placing it in quotation marks. If you remove the quotation marks, you resign yourself to being different from everyone else, alone, cut off, etc. It also bothers me that you're concious of how you warp realities and take it out on yourself. It'd be much more powerful and effective if you were to write about actual events where that happens as opposed to just saying you do it. If you say you do it, it's silly. It evokes much more emotion in the reader to make that acknowledgement of you doing it to yourself, than you telling them. When you're that straightforward, it calls into question if the writer is doing this for self expression and exploration, or if its for attention. Often times thats the difference between teen angst writing and depressing books that get published. Alot of teens are slightly unhappy and suddenly write poems about cutting themselves expecting attention and adoration, while there will be someone who writes subtely about them doing it. Of course, the teen angst overt method gets the attention, but the subtle showing rather than telling makes for more effective writing. I suppose it depends on your personal goal in writing this, but my strong strong preference is the showing route. Maybe its because I've had alot of exposure to the topic, but I personally feel that overall the self mutilation topic is trite and overused. I like the imagery of a ciggarrette in your mouth in the tub, it creates a bit of character, rather than random-generic-teen-cutting-themself-in-the-bath. As a whole, there is undeniable potential, parts of that excert include original thoughts, well-used imagery, and a wide vocabulary, however the topic as a whole is slightly worn, and a bit redundant. You can only say you're lonely and hurt so many different ways so many different times before people get bored. [And for any whiners, any negativity isn't out of spite or for the sake of being hurtful. I left "so emo" rather than typing all of that out for fear of someone jumping down my throat because I personally wasn't utterly woo'd by the two paragraphs -.-]
